Welcome to another
Saturday of Science Fiction & Fantasy snippets exchanged by writers. http://scififansat.blogspot.com/
My contribution this
week comes from my WIP, Grand Master's Game, Book 2 in the Grand Master’s Trilogy.
Excerpt
Athanor strode into the room and looked
around with a proprietary air, as if he was examining one of his establishments.
When she entered, Violet noticed a regular series of slow clicks emerging from
a metal box on the desk. Phineas stood up politely, and Violet hid her
amusement at the contrast between the two men. Even disguised and shielded,
Athanor exuded an air of authority tinged with menace, while the professor was a bright-eyed academic, brimming with curiosity.
Tessa stepped
into the office and cried in her nervous high-pitched voice, “Oh, Phineas, I didn’t
realize you had visitors.” Her beautiful face brightened on recognizing her
friend, Violet, and Tessa ran to hug her.
Athanor frowned at the interruption and the
door slammed shut, leaving an unnatural silence.
Tessa stared intently at his saturnine face, which
radiated confident pride despite his disguise. Her eyes widened in shocked
insight and she yelped, “Violet, he’s your Grand Master!”
They all stared at Athanor. His figure appeared
to grow taller and darker. The room filled with psi pressure and blue rays flared from his unveiled eyes. Simultaneously, the clicks from the box sped up until
their volume reached a shattering crescendo. Athanor’s gaze flicked to the box
and the clicks halted abruptly.
Tessa gasped and clutched at her chest.
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Wowsers! That took a dangerous turn at the end there...good snippet!
ReplyDeleteYes, he's deadly.
DeleteBeware suddenly-silent metal boxes! Wonderful and intriguing snippet!
ReplyDeleteBeware unshielded Grand Masters
DeleteGreat job building the suspense with the master's unveil timed with the ticking box. That's a fun idea - Looking to add some suspense to your scene? Throw a ticking box in the middle of it and watch how your characters react. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteA black box!
DeleteI love the contrast between the two men. And the cliffhanger at the end is great!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
DeleteAlmost as good as dragons - they come later.
Oi vey. Sometimes some people should really learn when to close their mouths...
ReplyDeleteOr stop showing of their powers.
DeleteWhy do I get the feeling that it's not a good thing that box stopped ticking?
ReplyDeleteThe next part is on today's post
ReplyDelete