Sunday, May 31, 2015

8-10 Sentences for #WeWriWa - Grand Master's Pawn 2


Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Here, writers showcase their work with 8-10 sentences.
This week, I’ll continue the scene from Grand Master’s Pawn. Pursuing her dream to explore exotic planets, Violet has applied to become the pawn of one of the Grand Masters, beings of immense psychic power. She has hidden her illegal talent of empathy. I’ve included one sentence from last week’s snippet.

The hazy image resolved into twelve people seated on thrones, human men and women and alien creatures. Their eyes glowed in the colors she had seen on the spheres. One alien was a mass of writhing tentacles, while another resembled a green blob. One humanoid woman wore red robes, another woman had a green gown, and two men were clad in somber black robes.

In the midst of this amazing sight, her attention was caught by a dark man in blue robes seated at one end of the twelve. He had a grim face with fierce black eyebrows over a hooked nose. His eyes were half lidded. While she watched, his eyes opened and blue beams flashed out, piercing into her face. She stared boldly into his laser blue eyes. Yet in the next moment, his eyes slid slowly past, and she doubted he had even noticed her.



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18 comments:

  1. Love the description, Aurora! What an intimidating scene. She might doubt he'd noticed her...but I don't. :-)

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    1. Of course, but neither of them can be sure, since it should be impossible for her to see the Grand Masters.

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  2. I wondered if he was searching out her illegal power? I think he definitely noticed her.

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    1. He noticed, but doesn't believe she could see him.

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  3. Very interesting snippet! I'm also thinking that he noticed her, and tried to play it cool. Tried being the key word. ;)

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  4. I'll bet he's tricking her. This sounds like a very precarious situation. Love the description of the different beings.

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  5. Fascinating scene, really making me ponder the ramifications and what might happen next. Terrific snippet!

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  6. Given the vividness off his searchlight eyes, I'm sure something will come of his passing glance.

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  7. Love that first impression. Can't wait for them to meet!

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    1. It takes half the book before they meet in person.

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  8. Since you wouldn't mention the effect of that gaze on her, I doubt that there was "nothing to it". You mention her illegal gift of empathy. Is just empathy forbidden, and if so... why would be interesting to know, given how many other psychic talents there could be and how they could be used.

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    1. The Grand Masters prohibit anyone with psychic talents from becoming pawns. They enjoy their superiority. But, of course, it's more complicated.

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    1. Thanks! I hope Book 2 will be ready in a few weeks.

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