Saturday, June 6, 2015

8-10 sentences for Weekend Writing Warriors - Grand Master's Pawn #3



Welcome to another Sunday with Weekend Writing Warriors. Here, writers showcase their work with 8-10 sentences.
This week, I’ll continue the scene from Grand Master’s Pawn. Pursuing her dream to explore exotic planets, Violet has applied to become the pawn of one of the Grand Masters, beings of immense psychic power. She has hidden her talent of empathy, since psychics are banned from becoming pawns. I’ve included one sentence from last week’s snippet. 

Yet in the next moment, his eyes slid slowly past, and she doubted he had even noticed her.
She stiffened in alarm and shielded, hoping to conceal her psychic power. The eerie vision of the twelve entities vanished as swiftly as it had arisen. Surely, she had perceived the mysterious Grand Masters in the transient image.
She blinked, returning to the reality of the interview room with the lighted spheres on black cylinders. The mechanical voice called, “You have been chosen. Walk through the exit on your right.”
Violet grinned and raised her fist in triumph. She had succeeded in the first step of her risky venture. As a pawn, she could study her Grand Master and pursue her dream of exotic travel.  


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16 comments:

  1. It could be just conjecture, but I've never heard of pawns having an easy go of things. ;) Still, really great snippet with a well built setting. :)

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    1. There wouldn't be a story if it was easy!

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  2. I'm with Amy. The whole concept of being a pawn sounds like it will end badly. But then, Violet does have an ace up her sleeve. (or does she?)

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    1. She gets to the other side of the board, eventually.

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  3. Love the idea that she can see the grand masters when they're supposed to be concealed. I have the feeling the next stage will be much more difficult.

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  4. As successful as she's been, I can't help feeling that her deception will come back to bite her in the end.

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  5. Pawn, though. Pawns don't have a lot of power usually do they? Still, if the game is properly played...

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    1. The chess analogy is like Alice Though the Looking Glass.

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  6. Yay! For now. I'm a little worried as to why she passed exactly. She might not be the only person (being?) around with hidden goals.

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  7. I hope she doesn't get overconfident from her first success. Really enjoying the story! Can't wait to read more...

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  8. Nice world-building, Aurora. The lighted spheres on black cylinders pulled me in. I'm intrigued--I just bought it on Amazon. Not sure when I'll get to it, but I have it downloaded so it doesn't slip by me. :-)

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    1. Great!
      I'm finishing Book 2 and posting snippets on SFFSat.

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